Discover: Special brain issue not so special–but read the mountain lion story!
Wednesday, May 26th, 2010
Forget fight or flight. In a special issue on the brain, Discover magazine explains that’s it’s all about the four F’s: fight, freeze, flight, or fright.
And writer Jeff Wise elaborates on that with a story of an encounter between Sue Yellowtail, a 25-year-old water-quality specialist for the Ute Indian tribe, and a mountain lion.
Wise tracks Yellowtail with the deadly acuity of a mountain lion as she passes through the four stages. It’s an illuminating and dramatic story.
But it could have been much more. (In fairness, this is an excerpt from Wise’s 2009 book, Extreme Fear, so my comments about how the story could have been better should be directed, I suppose, both to Wise and to the editors at Discover.)
The Discover excerpt begins like this:
In the throes of intense fear, we suddenly find ourselves operating in a different and unexpected way. The psychological tools that we normally use to navigate the world—reasoning and planning before we act—get progressively shut down. In the grip of the brain’s subconscious fear centers, we behave in ways that to our rational mind seem nonsensical or worse…
And he goes on to for a couple of grafs explaining the four F’s, until he gets to this:
On a winter morning a few years back, a young woman named Sue Yellowtail went through them all in about 10 minutes.
Ah, now we’re getting to the drama. But before getting to the mountain lion, Wise gives us a little natural history (“The Mancos river rises in southwestern Colorado…”), and background on Yellowtail (“Sue Yellowtail was just a few years out of college…”).
It’s all useful stuff, establishing the scene and introducing us to the character. But before pulling the camera back to give us the scene, and before the biographical info on Yellowtail, how about starting with this, which is graf #7 in Wise’s (Discover’s) telling:
On a clear, cold morning in late December, [Sue] Yellowtail pulled her pickup over to the side of a little-used dirt double-track, a few yards from a simple truss bridge that spanned a creek. As she collected her gear, she heard a high-pitched scream. Probably a coyote killing a rabbit, she thought. She clambered down two steep embankments to the water’s edge. Wading to the far side of the creek, she stooped to stretch her tape measure the width of the flow. Just then she heard a rustling and looked up. At the top of the bank, not 30 feet away, stood a mountain lion. Tawny against the brown leaves of the riverbank brush, the animal was almost perfectly camouflaged. It stared down at her, motionless.
Maybe it could be compressed even more, to give it more punch:
On a clear, cold morning in late December, Yellowtail pulled her pickup over to the side of a little-used dirt double-track, a few yards from near a truss bridge that spanned a creek. As she collected her gear, she heard a high-pitched scream. Probably a coyote killing a rabbit, she thought. She clambered down two steep embankments to the water’s edge. Wading to the far side of the creek, she stooped to stretch her tape measure the width of the flow. Just then she heard a rustling and looked up. At the top of the bank, not 30 feet away, stood a mountain lion, . Tawny against the brown leaves of the riverbank brush, the animal was almost perfectly camouflaged. It stared down at her, motionless.
This is just a quick-and-dirty edit, but you get the idea. As short and punchy as possible, getting to the mountain lion as quickly as possible.
Then Wise could follow either with a bit more of the story, or he could step away from the narrative for an explanation of the four F’s.
For my money, less telling–and more showing–might have made this a better piece. On the other hand, it’s pretty darn good the way it is, and I won’t tell you what happened. No spoilers here. Read it yourself.
I’d like to lay out for you the other stories in Discover’s special brain issue, but the website does not make it easy to determine what’s in the magazine and what isn’t. There is probably a “this month’s issue” page with a table of contents here somewhere, but I can’t seem to find it. Clicking on “brain special issue” gives me the Wise piece and two other stories. But it’s not clear whether that is the entire brain package in the magazine. (I know, I could go out and buy the magazine, but I’d be likely to come back with a handful of magazines and never finish this post. Besides, my nightstand is about to collapse under the weight of all the print that’s already there.)
One of the brain-issue stories is by Kathleen McGowan who writes about fenestration. Can’t guess? It’s the art of cutting around a skull to open a window on the brain and remove it. (Not to be confused with defenestration, which is defined, I think, as something writers often want to do to editors.)
McGowan walks us through the fenestration and dissection of the brian of H.M., whose epilepsy surgery destroyed his memory. It was one of the most studied brains in history, and when H.M. died, researchers were eager to examine his brain. Nice science story, even without a mountain lion.
The third piece is an excerpt from Stuff, a fascinating new book on hoarding by Randy O. Frost and Gail Steketee. A taste:
I could feel the cockroaches surrounding me as I stepped in. The walls were coated with their brown dung, and occasionally one dropped from the ceiling onto the piles of debris below…
(Check out the book, too. You’ll learn things about the fascinating Collyer brothers that you haven’t heard before, I’m pretty sure.)
If these three articles are the whole of Discover’s special brain issue, then Discover deserves a demerit. McGowan’s piece is the only original article in the bunch. The two others are book excerpts. And Wise’s book was published in 2009. A year-old book excerpt?
What is is that the print people always say to dismiss web news sites? Oh, yeah: “They’re just aggregators. They wouldn’t survive a week without print to borrow from.”
Discover may be forging a new path–an aggregator in print. Or maybe not so new. Anyone remember Reader’s Digest?
- Paul Raeburn